Grimmly Suspended (Flash Fiction)

It’s my pleasure to thank Priceless Joy for this photo prompted Flash Fiction challenge (75 – 175 words). I’d also like to thank pixabay.com for this ominous shot.

Alice’s POV

“Missed me already?” Hansel’s acidic words drip down from the cage suspended above.

These swines have him locked below their castle. Not in the dungeons. Under them. For good measure, but I still despise them for it.

I shiver and wrap my dusty cloak tighter around myself.

Our nation’s darling princess tilts her diamond-clad head and squeezes my shoulder. “Are you certain you want to do this?”

I nod. Contempt straddles my tongue. I can’t risk revealing it with the tremble of my voice.

She draws back between her guards.

I lick my chapped lips. “How could I not miss you, Hansel?”

He bangs his body against the bars. Wide-eyed, he darts his gaze from me to the princess and her pigs.

Yet, in a split second, he becomes stone-faced. “You . . . shouldn’t have come.”

I clench my hands, willing my heartbeat to steady. “You should’ve kept your promise.” (To save yourself. Stay safe.)

His dark eyes gleam as his magic faintly prickles my senses. Somehow, it’s contained in that cage. Still, the guards behind me shift and tense their shoulders.

I lift my chin higher. “This is merely temporary. We shouldn’t worry about each other . . . ?”

Hansel grins, baring sharp teeth. It fades, and he inches back, out of view. “Don’t come here again.”

 (213 words, darn it! -_-)

35 comments on “Grimmly Suspended (Flash Fiction)

  1. Oh, very intriguing. I do want to know what’s going to happen!
    I love the title, by the way 🙂

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  2. Excellent! I see a continuation on this one… I hope. 😀 😀

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  3. Very nice.

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  4. Nice job, Izzy, very creepy

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  5. This is a creative take on the prompt with vivid images That I could envision the characters as I was reading the words. Job well done! 🙂

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  6. A nice touch of fantasy, imaginatively written, Izzy. A very appropriate title, too. 🙂

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  7. Very creative and well written. Great descriptions of the characters.

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  8. Very intense. And very gritty. I bet you could cut it down if you wanted to make the word count and it’d work well with this story, a few short cutting sentences.

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  9. Very good…in a creepy sort of way. Maybe she should heed his advice.

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  10. Hi Izzy! I just wanted to stop by and thank you for participating in these challenges. I sure hope you will continue! I love reading your stories. 🙂

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