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Why Yes, This is a Bikini (Flash Fiction)

Thank you, Priceless Joy, for hosting this writing challenge: Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. Another thanks goes to Louise for providing the inspiring photo prompt this week. If you lovely people reading haven’t heard of or joined this challenge, please try it out. It’s a great way to connect with others and share stories. Check out PJ’s blog for more details and entertaining entries. You won’t regret it.

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Now, to the story:

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He pushes a wheelbarrow out to the field. My hands get clammy. I wish I could say it’s just from the sun.

He gets to work, muscles moving underneath his shirt. The jerk. I’m Gloria Freakin’ Gonzalez. The least he could do is spare me a glance. I mean, it’s only right since I’ve tried talking to him countless times through the tall fence. I even sat outside once in a bikini, surrounded by roses. And I invited a bunch of friends over, like see, everybody loves me.

Nothing works.

I pat my breasts. “You win some, you lose some, right?” I sigh and glare over at the field.

Just then, some elderly woman with sagging tattoos comes out of his house. She hobbles over to him and taps his shoulder, pausing his sifting through the dirt.

She makes a sweeping motion with her left hand. Then another with her right.

He nods and moves his hands with quick, measured gestures.

I gasp. “He’s deaf?!”

The woman jerks her head up, startled.

I hurry back inside, blushing, grinning, and restrategizing. Game back on.

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(183 words)
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37 comments on “Why Yes, This is a Bikini (Flash Fiction)

  1. I couldn’t help smiling at the end, she certainly knows what she wants doesn’t she?

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  2. Hahaha, it’s time for a plan B! Girl knows what she wants 😄

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  3. I doubt that she will waste any time in figuring out how to reach him. She sounds like a very persistent person. Great story.

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  4. Great story! It reminds me of, “Everything isn’t always what it seems.” LOL! Now she can come up with a new plan of action. Your story kept me riveted to my seat!

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  5. I am so glad she can see beyond him being deaf.

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  6. Haha Izzy you’re back! Yay! I always love your interesting takes. I love the image of this neighbour in a bikini trying to get this hot guy gardening to see her and talk to her. I’m sure he definitely sees, now she’ll have to figure out how to communicate. I’m happy she likes him despite his disability, it doesn’t even enter her mind that it’s an issue. Way to go Izzy 🙂

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    • Mandi! *hugs* Ha, yes, I’m back to this wonderful community and glad you enjoyed my flash fiction, too. I’m 100% sure the guy has noticed her, and nope, she doesn’t seem intimidated by him being Deaf. 😀 Great catch on that! My MC isn’t so familiar with the language, culture, and life, but she’s very much interested. She’s going for it and taking a chance. Hopefully, the gardener is willing, too.

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  7. I’m glad that his disability hasn’t put her off. She’s definitely a determined woman with a very clear view if what she wants! A great story, Izzy, with a wonderfully vivid character. 🙂

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  8. New strategy! I love women who go after what they want. Nice story.

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  9. Hey !

    Thanks for following my blog 🙂

    I would like to invite you to #MiracleChallenge which is a weekly writing challenges to write Story/Tiny Tale/ Poem/ Haiku.

    Here is the link for latest prompts for 5 different challenges :

    https://miraclegirlblog.wordpress.com/2016/07/26/miraclechallenge-week-7-dated-26th-july-1st-august-2016/

    Hope you feel inspired and have fun writing them.

    From,
    Miracle 🙂

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  10. Well, she’s enterprising, I’ll give her that, even if a tiny bit full of herself. I wonder whether Mr Dreamboat has spied her through the fence and is just making her wait? Great story with a strong build up and a satisfying pay off. Nicely done.
    My first time on FFfAW and loving everyone’s stories so far 🙂

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  11. Oh, I like this very much, Izzy. You made her character come alive and showed us her mixed-up feelings over the way he ignores her. We have various emotions tumbling out – Including puzzlement, disappointment, indignation and hurt pride. And in the end she shows elation and gutsy determination to rethink her strategies.

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  12. Hmm! That’s a lady on a mission. I enjoyed this spin 🙂

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  13. she’s clearly a go-getter, eh? Love the twist!

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