Voilà (Flash Fiction)

Big thanks to Priceless Joy for hosting Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers (75 – 175 words) and Sonya for providing the inspiring photo prompt this week. If you haven’t heard of or joined this challenge, please do yourself a favor and check out PJ’s blog for more details and entertaining entries. You won’t regret it.


Now onto the story:


With a flick of my wrist, a tidal wave towers over the redheaded bimbo’s ship. How could my beloved prince ever sleep with such a dimwitted human who would stand there gasping, instead of running away from danger?

I sneer as my wave knocks the redhead down. Her face smacks against the deck, leaving a bloody trail behind as the water wraps around her ankle and drags her off the ship.

My water engulfs her, pushing from all sides. She thrashes her arms and legs wildly, and I can almost imagine the sweet burn in her lungs.

“Don’t fight it,” I whisper, forcing her mouth open from a distance.

The cold water floods into her. Voilà, no more struggling. Blood seeps out of her nose and mouth and pollutes the ocean with red swirls.

I order my mermaidens to clean her ship and sneak her limp body down to my shimmering castle. With tasty spices, I’ll feed her to my prince, make love to him, and then consider becoming a widow.


(172 words)



As a side note, I wanted to share my thoughts for other flash fictions inspired by the photo prompt. NONE of them worked out for me, but hey. The first one was a “The Day After Tomorrow” type of story.

The second one started off with a skittish character who’s too scared to get on the ship. That person would have said, “I’ve seen Titanic. I know how this ends.” 😛

And the third was about zombies overtaking a ship.

But yeah, I ended up setting those aside and going for the wicked mermaid.

15 comments on “Voilà (Flash Fiction)

  1. No greater wrath than a woman scorned especially towards the other woman. Wonderful story Izzy, I really enjoyed reading it. It was very powerful! Loved the ending, “…then consider becoming a widow.” No greater wrath… I loved your story!

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  2. Extremely creative. Though I feel having the prince eat his mistress is a bit much lol

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  3. I love the title, and the line it comes from: “Voilà, no more struggling.” It sums up the mermaid’s anger. She is one scary mermaid; I like scary mermaids 🙂

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  4. You don’t want to get on the wrong side of that vampire witch mermaid.

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  5. Initially I thought she was a vampire from your animated gif. LOL! 😀 Who knows, she’s a scary angry mermaid. 🙂 Enjoyed your story. 🙂


  6. Great story! It’s very creepy.


  7. This is one scary story. Do not offend the lady, I repeat do not offend the lady. Good one.


  8. What the creative tale 🙂 there is nothing like the woman scorned, especially when that woman has powers! I like the ideas of the other flash fiction inspirations that you have decided to share… I think that maybe you should write all three!


  9. I love your scary mermaid – she’s wonderfully malicious. 🙂 A great story. Very entertaining.


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