The Sun Will Come Out Tomorrow (Flash Fiction)

This is in response to the Flash Fiction challenge for Aspiring Writers (75 – 175 words). Thanks to Priceless Joy and Ady for this opportunity. PJ hosts this challenge and Ady, who’s the author of the blog “The Bourne of Infinitude,” provided the inspiring photo. If you haven’t heard of or joined this challenge, please take the time to check out PJ’s blog for more details and entertaining entries (the link’s below).


Nathan’s 100-watt smile breaks through the gray mist lying low above the ocean. He points at his wife and three sisters-in-law. “Prepare to be amazed by water that never looked so turquoise. Sand that never felt so soft, like powder. Lush green trees that never carried such juicy apples and mangoes. I hope you brought extra panties, ladies. Paradise is right ahead.”

His wife, sitting on the other side of the boat in a red coat, squirts water between the leaves of her potted plant. The early morning light streams into her blonde hair tied up in a bun. The strands sticking out appear golden against her glowing skin. That damn green plant rests on her lap. The leaves hang over the black pot almost as if to brush her small belly, just shy of being a three-month incubator. She hums and squirts more water.

Nathan advances towards her, wobbling the boat and making every woman but her cry out. He scowls and sits next to his beloved Hannah.

(169 words)


Part II

“Hey, are you listening to me?” Nathan rubs her back as she replaces the plastic bottle with scissors and cuts off the rotting end of a leaf. He still can’t believe she brought that thing here.

He frowns. “Isn’t that the same leaf you cut last time?”

“Mmm. It grew back and decayed again.” Hannah drops the scissors and pushes his hand away. “The problem isn’t the leaf. It’s the root.”

“Babe, it’s just a plant. Put it down and look around us. Yeah, it’s all gray right now, but it’s still a beautiful sight.”

“Just a plant?”

“We’ve been saving for a trip like this for years. Nothing against your love for botany, but I’d appreciate it if you’d be here with me today.”

She yanks the plant out from the pot and slams it on his lap. Dirt flies everywhere.

“Ugh!” His covers his face. “You got some in my eye.”

She shoots up and wavers. Her sisters try to grab her hands and steady her, but she swats them away. “I’ve been seeing someone else!”

Silence grips everyone’s throat.

Nathan ignores the pain and irritation in his eyes as he squints at Hannah. “That isn’t true.”

She presses a hand to her stomach.

He stands. The boat tips over.

(212 words)



24 comments on “The Sun Will Come Out Tomorrow (Flash Fiction)

  1. That is some story, and I like their voices in this. Will there be a continuation?

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  2. I think the sun’s set on this relationship… Love how you used the plant to show that Hannah’s mind is somewhere else. Nice work again, Izzy!

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  3. Goodby Hannah and the sister-in-laws, seems they are fish food now!

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  4. I am always amazed by how many people step into small boats without PFD’s. [Personal Floatation Device] … nice fiction!

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  5. Exciting! Whose baby is it? Will they all be okay after the boat tips?

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  6. A very inspirational piece of work ~ I love the plant sequence too ~ There is certainly room for more here ~ Well written 🙂

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  7. wow what a twisted story.. nice ending, I like how your direction took on the challenge

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  8. Wow that did not end well.

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  9. when pruning doesn’t help, one must just uproot the entire thing. she seems an unsettled sort to me anyway. too much family all about all the time perhaps?
    The parts worked well together.

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  10. Wow…intrigued ! ☺ Van

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  11. An interesting story, Izzy. I love the use of the plant – very effective. 🙂 I just hope there aren’t any sharks in that water…

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  12. Yes, a continuation would be great. It sounds like everyone may have gone overboard if the boat tipped over. Lots of questions …do they all get saved, who does the baby belong to, what does Nathan do now, and what does Hannah do. I like the way you incorporated the plant in the story. 🙂

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  13. You got me going “Awwww….”. I felt Nathan was a great guy! What made Hannah cheat on him!? And this story feels oddly close to home from some angles. Well, I guess that shows the mark of a great writer! Bravo! Loved your two-part flash fiction!!

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  14. Ohh, nice twist at the end. I don’t think the baby is Nathan’s. I like … silence grips everyone’s throats. I can imagine the awkwardness! Probably not the best time to announce that you’re seeing someone else in a boat in the middle of nowhere!! 🙂 I too liked all the plant references.

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