Day 2: Five Photos, Five Stories Challenge

Hospital Gone Wrong“Fool Me Once.”

Evvi pressed her face into the pillow. It’d been so long since she’d slept that good.

“Hello, Payton.”

She glared at the black-suited intruder sitting in the bedside chair. Feeling a sore tug on her forehead, she lifted her hands to the bandage — probably covering stitches. She tried to sit up, but the man outstretched his hand.

“That’s not a good idea.”

Evvi pushed his hand away and leaned back. She took in the white walls and the IV connected to her arm. The constant beeping sound lured her eyes to the heart monitor. She licked her dry lips and winced. The bottom was cut. ‘Oh, great.’ She took a deep breath and flipped the sheet over. The rest of her body was fine.

The man smiled, but it didn’t reach his eyes.

The doctor came in and examined Evvi’s — Payton’s — memory and concentration. Then she left Evvi with this annoying man.

No surprise when he whipped out his badge. “Name’s Detective Parker.”

‘Showtime.’ Evvi played with the bed sheet — pinch, release, pinch, release. “There was a man with me. Is he okay?”

Parker shifted around.

She balled the covers. “Where’s Luke?”

“He’s . . . missing.”

She froze. That bastard couldn’t have gotten away.

“You two were helped out of the car, but he took off.”

Her brother’s voice sliced through her mind. ‘Time to fall from your throne, princess.’ She hugged herself for show.

Parker touched her arm. “What happened this morning?”

She trembled with rage. “We were on the way to my father’s.”

“What’s your relation to Luke?”

‘Don’t throw up. Don’t throw up.’ She swallowed. “He’s my boyfriend.”

Parker screwed up his face. “But you’re—”

“Sixteen. Don’t start, I’ve heard it all.”

He scowled. “Who was driving?”

“H-He was.”

“Witnesses don’t think Luke lost control — it seemed deliberate. Do you understand what I’m saying, Payton?”

Evvi squeezed her eyes shut against the ache of her stitches. “He hates me.”

“Why do you say that?”

She made herself cry and buried her face into her hands.

Parker shot up and got tissues. “Okay. All right.” He placed the box beside her. “Has Luke been on edge lately?”

“Always.” Her chest convulsed as she seized a tissue and blew into it.

Parker grimaced and held up the wastebasket. “We managed to save your wallet and some clothes.”

Evvi jerked the bin from him. “My love drove us off a bridge and left me. You think my mind’s on clothes?”

“Distraction helps when I’m stressed.”

“I’m not you.”

“My apologies.”

She had enough of looking at his pathetic face, and all this crying was giving her a migraine. She closed her eyes. “Leave.”

“We’re not done.”

“Please! Just go.” She heard him move, but he didn’t leave. Her eyes met his green ones.

“When you’re released, you’ll be taken in for further questioning. An officer’s waiting in the hall.” He left.

Evvi punched the mattress. There had to be a way out.

(491 words)

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Sonya nominated me for the Five Photos, Five Stories Challenge — I’ll continue to thank her ever so kindly! If anyone hasn’t read her stories, you’re missing out. While she completed her series, this is my second entry (click here for part 1). Also, check out Ella aka Jumbleskine’s first entry.

The Five Photos, Five Stories Challenge rules require you to . . .

  • Post a photo each day for five consecutive days and attach a story to the photo.
  • The story can be fiction or non-fiction, a poem or simply a short paragraph — it’s entirely up to you.
  • Then each day, nominate another blogger to carry on this challenge. Accepting the challenge is entirely up to the person nominated, it is not a command.

Today, I nominate Jessica who paints pictures with words.

20 comments on “Day 2: Five Photos, Five Stories Challenge

  1. Oh wow! This is a gripping story and now I have so many questions. Why is a sixteen yr old dating Luke? (i assume he’s much older), where is Luke and why did he try ti kill her?
    Heading over to part 1 now 😉

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  2. I’m so glad they’re not dead! YAY! Really interesting twists, I love the details in this piece, especially how she plays with the sheet, that really tactile moment made me feel like I was right there in the story with her.

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    • Thanks for such enthusiasm and specificity; I find it to be very ingenuous and helpful. ❤ 😀 ❤

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      • The way you write about them makes me feel like they are very important to you, which is how it should be 🙂 But you’re very thorough in portraying them so I’m glad and I hope you will continue with them, even if you don’t post more here or take a break, which is totally cool, I feel the care you put into each story and that makes it more fun to read 🙂

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  3. Wow… after reading part 1, I thought they were dead! Of course, there would be no part 2 if that was the case. Gripping story, Izzy 🙂

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  4. Oh, the great mind of a writer! I am always in awe!

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  5. You’re right, after reading the part one I understand it much better. Still I really really want to know where is Luke/Rodney and why did he try to kill his sister. More so, why did she lie that her brother is her boyfriend?
    Hahaha, you’ve awoken so many questions izzy 😀

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  6. I’m glad she survived. if anything, I’m more intrigued after reading part 2… Thrilling story 🙂

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  7. That was fantastic Izzy. I have so many questions too. Better go and read part 1!

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  8. […] missing out. While she completed her series, this is my third entry (click here for part 1 and here for part 2). Also, check out Ella aka Jumbleskine’s first entry and Jessica’s second […]


  9. […] missing out. While she completed her series, this is my fourth entry (click here for part 1, here for part 2, and here for part 3). Also, check out Ella aka Jumbleskine’s second entry, […]


  10. […] missing out. While she completed her series, this is my final entry (click here for part 1, part 2, part 3, and part 4). Also, check out Ella aka Jumbleskine’s fourth entry, Jessica’s […]


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