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Flash Fiction Challenge: Serving “Justice”

In response to PJ’s photo prompted Flash Fiction challenge (75 – 175 words). Special thanks to Dawn M. Miller for the photo.

Tennis Court

Beaten, battered, scrambled, torn. My life is worn by a stranger with my face. A stranger who accepts peace in installments. Dammit, he’s home again.

~*~

Emboldened by fallacies, my beloved strikes me from night to morn. Wait it out. Wait for the front door to slam, for the picture frames to cease their shaking, before I sneak away.

~*~

Hank tosses over a racket; I catch it by hand. He teaches me to be strong, teaches me to stand. The tennis court contradicts my life in the sand. Reshaping, I somehow rise in the ranks.

~*~

Taste of life, taste of power. I’m weary of the war, the box, his seed. The sores for all to see and feed. Launch and smack the ball; grow weak, for a reason. Oh, if you only knew how the ball sails far beyond where my worries sink.

~*~

Empowered and enraged, I slam the front door. For once, this floor becomes my stage. I throw my bag down, grip my racket, and refuse my sweet beloved’s cage. And in court, I make sure to give Hank my thanks.

(186 words, eek! ^^’  😳)

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20 comments on “Flash Fiction Challenge: Serving “Justice”

  1. I like how you say tennis sails past her worries. I’m glad she has an outlet for her rage and what is happening in her personal life.

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  2. Wow! A wonderful story and all in 14 sentences. (I might have to recount that but that’s what I counted). Awesome! Thank you for participating and I really hope you will continue. 🙂

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  3. This was lovely. It was incredibly moving. I hope it’s fiction! Glad it ended well for her. I love the use of short sentences, I sometimes think that I over use them all the time.
    xo

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    • Thanks for reading and expressing your reaction! I understand your dilemma (about short sentences). I have to remind myself that as with all things, too much of a “good” thing may become a “bad” thing. Then again, there are exceptions to that rule. It all depends on what you’re writing, and if short sentences are your style, then they’re your style ^_^

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  4. That was awesome.

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  5. This is a great piece of writing, izzy. It’s so nicely laid out on the page and reads almost like a poem.
    Ellespeth

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    • Thank you so much. And I agree; it does read almost like a poem. I couldn’t help myself. ^_^ If that’s where the river’s flowing, that’s where the river’s flowing. Hopefully that makes sense!

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  6. This is an excellent piece of writing, I enjoyed very much!

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  7. Awesome write…you wrote it out like a ballad…great job!!! And it was very realistic…good for her…awesome ending!!

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  8. This is very poetic. I liked how you got a feeling for what the MC is feeling. And how she uses something she enjoys to find strength. I really hope she leaves her current love for Hank!

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  9. This is excellent Izzy. I love how you used the tennis/court as a metaphor for life and dealing with its challenges. Well done.

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  10. This was excellently written. It read almost like a poem of life. Glad she found tennis and empowerment on and in the court(s).

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